Chapter 1: Paths Intertwine
One pleasant and sunny afternoon, Sakura Kinomoto decided to go out. Father Ill be at the park with Tomoyo! she hollered hurrying to the door.
Have a safe trip Sakura-chan, Fujitaka replied smiling.
Sakura strapped on her helmet and skated off to the park with Kero tagging along. Why do you have to go to the park? Kero asked as he peeked out of Sakuras velvet bag.
How should I know, Tomoyo just called and asked me to hurry to the park, Sakura answered hastily.
When the two made it to the park, they admired the scenery for just a moment. It was the first week of spring and the cherry blossoms were in bloom. The air was light but warm.
Amazing, its barely spring but the trees are already blooming, Sakura observed admiringly.
Its amazing
Kero turned and frowned, I feel a strange presence.
Sakura-chan! a voice beckoned, Over here!
Sakura turned around; they saw a cheerful Tomoyo waving to her. Next to Tomoyo stood a boy, appearing to be much older than she is. Sakura immediately ran to her, Tomoyo-chan! Kero quickly hid inside Sakuras bag
Tomoyo-chan good morning Sakura greeted with a smile.
Good morning Sakura-chan and Kero-chan! Tomoyo replied as she looked at the bag.
Kero popped out of the bag, Good morning!
Good morning the boy also greeted. He didnt seem to be surprised of Kero.
Sakura observed the boy for a while. He was tall and had short but messy hair of which was a dark brown. He was looking at her gently with his deep amber eyes. He was wearing a black tank, black glove along with baggy pants with dark sturdy boots. He was wearing a worn out green cloak with goggles on top of it all. His smile was bright.
This person, what is this warm feeling Sakura wondered. It was like she knew him and yet she didnt.
Good morning! a voice boomed. Suddenly a little white ball bounces onto Sakuras shoulder from under the boys cloak.
Hoe! Sakura was surprised and fell. She then looked at the white ball of which looked like a manjuu.
Ah sorry, the white thing said, Im Mokona Modoki but you can call me Mokona!
Mokona? Sakura stared with a questioned look.
Tomoyo and Kero quickly helped Sakura up, Mokona bounced up to the boys shoulder. The boy smiled, Im Syaoran, sorry for the surprise.
Syaoran, Sakura repeated, she looked at him again warmly. Its nice to meet you, Sakura smiled, Syaoran smiled back.
They look the same and have the same name, this cant be coincidence, Sakura thought to herself. No it isnt coincidence.
Syaoran had just finished grocery shopping and was heading home. He paused for just a moment right before opening the door.
What is this presence? Syaorans thoughts started circling wildly.
He unlocked the door and hurried in to put away his groceries. He went out and locked the door once more and tried to trace the presence. He can feel two from where he is currently, but theyre far apart. The one thats closest to him had been traced to the Kings Penguin playground.
Syaoran stopped and walked towards the slide. He looked around with haste and caution. He glanced at the large slide for just a moment and placed his hand on its metal coat.
Um
a voice mumbled.
Syaoran immediately turned around with alert.
In front of him stood a teenage girl wearing light colored clothing colored white and lined magenta. A cloak of the same material covered her. She had short but sleek auburn hair and was looking at him with her deep emerald eyes. She looked worried and yet frightened.
Do you need something? Syaoran asked earnestly still cautious. The girl looked surprised as if she didnt expect Syaoran to respond.
Um... could you help me find someone? the girl said embarrassingly looking down.
Not really sure what to say to her Syaoran responded,You need help looking for someone? He wasnt sure if he could open up to her.
The girl just nodded, Yes, you see, I came from a different world to search for my memories.
Syaoran was at disbelief but listened anyway.
I have companions with me but it seems that I have landed far from where they are, the girl continued.
Fine Ill help you look for your companions but dont expect me to believe your story, Syaoran answered and started to walk off being just slightly irritated.
Ah thank you so much, the girl smiled with relief and started to follow him.
Syaoran blushed, Whats your name anyway?
The girl responded, My name is Sakura of Clow Country














Comments
Interesting story....hehehe... I wonder where Kuro-pin and Fai-san are? ;D
Anyway.......I wanted to make one little comment on your story. I think you might need to add a bit. more descriptive words to it, and when describing the character try to use different vocabulary instead of "he/she wore this. he/she wore that." I had the same problem before. I'm just stating my opinion. I try to help my super special buddies improve. But I'll tell you that this is much better than much of the other fiction I've read. At least you're organized and more descriptive. Keep up the good work!!
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